blog 9

As a writer I did not see much improvement in my writing.It was kind of confusing to me because what is accepted by one reader is disregarded by the other. Its like the say: one man's waste is another man's treasure.The first essay I wrote in this class was mediocore to me,however my professer found it to be and exceptional piece.He said I am a thoughtfull writer.He said I develop my points well which I agree. But there were some things I that he said that I was not clear about.In the first essay I made a point on slavery. I said in that essay that those who were born into slavery did not believe freedom was possible. When Martin luther king fought for equality of trearment regardless of your ethnic group and succeeded it brougth tremendous happiness. These slave were entitled to a proper education,voting rights,a seat on a bus ride etc. This point was related to the thesis: the the reality is better than the illussiom (living in the cave).The reality was better than the illusion. The illusion was that slavery was not possible but the reality was that it was actually possible and better because those who were slaves were able to benifit from a proper education and equal voting rights which was actually better than the illussion.So I did not understand my professor when he stated that he did not understand how my point fitted in with the thesis.
The in-class dicussion was very helpful to me especially when we looked at the move and discussed it the following class.Maybe I did not pay full attention to the movie the matrix but when I looked at it I thought the the matrixs was the spacesuttle ship that Neo,Trinity,Morpeus was in. I did not think that the matrixs was earth. Our class discussion helped me clarify that misconception. The movie titled minority report was more straight forward to me although it was, according to my professor, more complicated of the two movies.
Our peer reviews was great help to me. I tried helping others but I realized that writers are very obstinate.When your read a persons piece and tells him or her what to do he or she does not do it.They prefer to stick to there own way of writing. I was not one hundred percent satisfied with my grades because I thought my writing was very outstanding, especial the second and third essay. In the second essay I considered my audience view and then contradicted them. I believe that this is the best way to approach an argumentitive essay.This tecnique is what gives a writers pieces value but my essay did not really spark the interest of my professor he said I was too broad in my writing.In essay 3 I wrote exactly on my thesis hardly considering the opposing side and he said that I minimized the opposition point of view.So I am confused in the way he wants me to approach the essay or maybe I am not as a good writer as I thought I was. Maybe I am just an average writer and not exceptional one.
But that will not deter me from producing my piece. I like to read ,write and express myself in a poetic way.This is inbeded in my bones and I will always continue to do that.I love writing.I am a persistent person and I dont like to leave no stone unturned.What I will have to do is read other peoples writing and implement there approach in my writing which I will not like because as a writer I want to be as orginal as possible. I am looking forward to my other english classes.